sallama

Bonjours tous le monde .. J'ai écris une petite histoire en français et j'aimerai la traduire en anglais .. j'ai un peu avancé sur la traduction j'aimerais qu'on me corrige les fautes et qu'on m'aide a mieux formuler des phrases. Merci du temps que vous prendrez pour moi ..

Le texte en francais :

La sonnerie du réveil retentit dans le petit appartement de l’inspecteur James Cooper affichant 8h00. Il était temps de se rendre au travail. Âgé de 40 ans, il avait passé toutes ces années à traquer et arrêter voleur et tueur. Il ne s’en plaignait pas, depuis tout petit il en avait tant rêvé. À peine avait-il eut le temps de prendre sa douche que déjà le bureau l’appelait. Une fois de plus on le pressait et cette fois ci, pour un vol suivit d’un meurtre. Après s’être préparé, c’est affamé et fatigué qu’il se rendit sur la scène du crime, une bijouterie située au croisement d’Henri Bourassa et Vanhorne.

Un monde fou s’y trouvait, il se fraya un chemin, salua les policiers présents commanda un petit déjeuné à l’assistant et s’intéressa enfin au dossier qu’on lui avait remis. Tous les bijoux de grandes valeurs avaient été volées durant la nuit, toutes les vitres avaient été cassées et se répandaient sur le sol. Un homme était mort et gisait plus loin entouré de médecins. Il devait avoir 30 ans, mort d’une balle dans la tête, il n’avait pas souffert. Les caméras de surveillance avaient été coupées, donc aucune scène n’avait pu être enregistrée. Il y avait au milieu de la pièce une boucle d’oreille bleue argentée d’une valeur inestimable et d’une beauté sans égale, elle attira particulièrement l’attention de l’inspecteur. Il l’a pris et la glissa discrètement dans la poche de son jeans sans que personne ne le vît.

Deux semaines s’étaient écoulées depuis le vol et l’enquête n’avait pas vraiment avancé. C’est dans un café populaire en prenant son petit déjeuné qu’un matin James aperçu une amie ne portant qu’une boucle d’oreille ressemblant étonnamment à celle qu’il avait ramassé il y a quelques jours. Il l’appela se saluèrent et après avoir un peu parlé il l’interrogea sur l’origine de son bijoux et pourquoi en manquait-il une. La jeune femme sembla embarrassée et en larme elle avoua son vol. Attentif à sa tristesse, il lui proposa un accord : s’était l’anniversaire de sa femme demain, en échange de la deuxième boucle, il laisserait à son amie la liberté. Elle accepta et peu à peu, l’enquête s’oublia, l’inspecteur parti du pays, elle aussi. S’était la première fois que James Cooper procédait de la sorte. Mais pour un bijou à 8000$, il était lui aussi près à tout.


En anglais (avec pleins de faute et d'incorrections) :

The ringing of the alarm clock resounds in the small apartment of the inspector James Cooper posting 8h00. It was time to go to work. Old 40 years, he had spent all these years to track and stop robbers and killers. He did not complain any, since very small he had dreamed some so much. Hardly had he had time to take its shower that already the office called he. Once more he was pressed and this time, it's for a flies followed of a murder. After having prepared, it's famished and tired that he went on the scene of the crime, a jewellery located at the crossing of Henri Bourassa and Vanhorne.
An insane world was there; it cut through a path, greeted the police officers present, ordered small lunched at the assistant and was interested finally in the file that one had given to him. All the jewels of great values had been stolen during the night, all the panes had been broken and were spread on the ground. A man had died and lay further surrounded doctors. He looks to be 30 years old, died from a ball in the head, he had not suffered. The cameras of monitoring had been cut; therefore no scene could have been recorded. There was in the middle of the part a loop of blue ear silver plated of a priceless value and of a beauty without equal; it drew the attention of the inspector particularly. He took it and discreetly slipped it into the pocket of his jean without anybody seeing it.
Two weeks had been passed since the lies and the investigation did not have really advanced. It is in a lunched popular coffee by taking its small that one James morning seen a friend not carrying that a loop of ear resembling surprisingly that which it had collected a few days ago. It called it were greeted and after having spoken a little it questioned it on the origin of its jewels and why it missed one of them. The young woman seemed embarrassed and in tear it acknowledged her flies. Attentive with its sadness, it proposed an agreement to him: was the birthday of its wife tomorrow, in exchange of the second loop, he would leave with his friend freedom. It accepted and little by little, the investigation was forgotten, the inspector left the country, it too. Was the first time that James Cooper proceeded of the kind. But for a jewel with 8000$, it was him also close with all.

Si vous pouviez m'aider s'il vous plait ..

Changez des éléments du texte si celà vous arrange ..

sallama

Excusez moi, y aurait-il un problème avec ma demande ? J'aurais vraiment besoin de cette traduction avant Lundi .. s'il vous plais .

jierbe31

Bonsoir,

The alarm clock rang in the small apartment of inspector James Cooper, showing 8:00. It was time to go to work. Forty years old, he had spent all these years to track down and arrest robbers and killers. He did not complain about it because, when a child, he had dreamed of it so much. Hardly had he had the time to have a shower when the office called him already. Once more he was pressed and this time, it was for a theft and a murder. Starving and tired, he got ready and went to the crime scene, a jeweller's shop located at the crossing of Henri Bourassa and Vanhorne.
A lot of people were there. He elbowed his way, greeted the police officers here present, ordered some breakfast and finally got interested in the file that he had been given. All the jewels of great value had been stolen during the night, all the panes had been broken and were spread on the ground. A man had died and lay further away surrounded by doctors. He looked 30 years old, had died from a bullet in the head, he had not suffered. The surveillance cameras had been stopped; therefore no scene could have been recorded. In the middle of the room there was a blue silver plated earring of priceless value and matchless beauty. It particularly drew the inspector's attention. He picked it up and discreetly slipped it into the pocket of his jean without anybody seeing it.

Two weeks had passed since the burglary and the investigation had not really made progress. One morning, as he was having breakfast in a popular bar, James saw a friend of his who was wearing just one earring surprisingly similar to the one he had picked up a few days ago. He called her, invited her to his table and questioned her about the origin of her jewel and asked her why one was missing. The young woman seemed embarrassed and, bursting into tears, she acknowledged her theft. He was touched by her sadness and proposed a deal to her: tomorrow was his wife's birthday, in exchange for the second earring, he would let his friend free. She accepted and little by little the investigation was forgotten. The inspector left the country, so did she. It was the first time that James Cooper behaved that way. But for a jewel worth 8000$, he was ready for anything..

NB Même corrigée, ton histoire est peu crédible et le personnage de l'inspecteur encore moins.
Mais bon, je ne suis pas là pour critiquer le fond.
Pour ce qui est de la forme, parlons-en.
Vu le nombre d'impropriétés rencontrées, il est évident que tu t'es servie d'un traducteur en ligne. Mauvaise pioche !
Ne t'étonne donc pas si, jusqu'à ce soir, personne ne t'avait répondu.
Sans doute était-ce mon jour de bonté et ton jour de chance...???

sallama

oooo merci beaucoup beaucoup .. oui en effet j'ai utilisé un traducteur en ligne et malgrés l'histoire un peu nul je vous remercies beaucoup bnn soirée !!