Devoir to do: any correction welcome!

Artouche · 04-29-2008, 09:20 AM

Hi everybody, I have a devoir to do for tomorrow and I would want some advices about what I have already written. There must be a lot of syntax mistakes so don't hesitate to correct me

Enjoy reading...

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Devoir to do: What do you hope to accomplish within the next ten years? Explain.

What I hope to accomplish within the next ten years are my better projects; those I know that for certain reasons I won’t be able to carry out when my youth will be over. Ten years is a long period and I think I can divide in two shorter period periods: about 2 times 5 years. The first period I am going to talk about is my studies pursuit and what I am going to dedicate to them and then the second 5/6 years period linked to the 1st which will be the beginning of my working life. These two periods will be closely involved in travelling.

Thanks to the Erasmus program, travelling during the studies is really easy. Angers’s university has a lot of agreement with foreign universities and with motivation supported by a school record in due form, you can study wherever you want for a short time period of one year in Europe. The only drawback is that you can benefit from the Erasmus program once. Then you are free to go on studying abroad but in certain countries (the United Kingdom is a good example), tuition fees are very expensive and I couldn’t afford it without the state financial help. Fortunately there exist other agreements with universities all around the world. They are called ISEP program or bilateral agreement and allow us to discover new cultures and to study far away from France. Moreover there are no limits; you can benefit from more than once.
So next year I am going to spend one year in Newcastle in England and I am looking forward to improving my English skill, to discovering the English style of life and to making new foreign friends. In 2009, I would like to study in Japan, in Osaka where I have some Japanese friends. Therefore I will have to organize this second year abroad while I will be in England. I have already talked about this with the referent teacher and what I am sure is that I am going to study a lot. After being postgraduate I would want to spent my two last study year in one country but I don’t know yet which one to choose.

I want to do all this studies to be able to speak quite fluently at least 4 languages, French included, which will serve my long term project. My current dream is either to work in an Hostelling International system for young people coming from everywhere or even to manage and to run my own Hostelling International. These places are fantastic because they favour the personal blooming and increase foreign culture knowledge. They are good places to make friends for 1 week or forever. That’s why I am an LEA student; by studying management, maws and economy with 3 foreign languages, I will be able to carry out my dream.

As a conclusion I’d say that I want all my life to be travelling-oriented and that without any limit. That’s what I want to devote my next ten years. In a first time I am going to take advantage of the state and of the university assistances and then I am going to put what I have learnt into practice.

The_FD · 04-29-2008, 12:34 PM

Une brève relecture et quelques suggestions pour ton texte qui n'est déjà pas mal du tout.

What I hope to accomplish within the next ten years are my better projects; those I know that for certain reasons I won’t be able to carry out when my youth is over. Ten years is a long period and I think I can divide it into two shorter periods: about 5 years twice. The first period I am going to talk about is my study continuation and what I am going to dedicate to it and then, the second 5/6 years period is linked to the 1st and will deal with the beginning of my working life. These two periods will be closely involved in travelling.

Thanks to the Erasmus program, travelling during while studying is really easy. The university of Angers has a lot of agreements with foreign universities and with motivation supported by a school record in due form, you can study wherever you want for a short time period of one year in Europe. The only drawback is that you can benefit from the Erasmus program only once. Then you are free to go on studying abroad but in certain countries (the United Kingdom is a good example), tuition fees are very expensive and I couldn’t afford it without the state financial help. Fortunately there exist other agreements with universities all around the world. They are called ISEP program or bilateral agreement and allow us to discover new cultures and to study far away from France. Moreover there are no limits; you can benefit from more than once.
So, next year I am going to spend one year in Newcastle in England and I am looking forward to improving my English skill, to discovering the English style of life and to making new foreign friends. In 2009, I would like to study in Japan, in Osaka where I have some Japanese friends. Therefore, I will have to organize this second year abroad while I will be in England. I have already talked about this with the referent teacher and what I am sure is that I am going to study a lot. After being postgraduate I would like to spend my last two years as a student in one country but I don’t know yet which one to choose.

I want to do all these studies to be able to speak quite fluently at least 4 languages, French included, which will hopefully be useful in my long term project. My current dream is either to work in an Hostelling International system for young people coming from everywhere or even to manage and to run my own Hostelling International. These places are fantastic because they favour the personal blooming and increase foreign culture knowledge. They are good places to make friends for 1 week or forever. That’s why I am a LEA student; by studying management, maws (laws?) and economy with 3 foreign languages, I will be able to carry out my dream.

As a conclusion I’d say that I want all my life to be travel-oriented and that without any limit. Here is my plan for the next ten years. First, I am going to take advantage of the state and of the university assistances and then I am going to put what I have learned into practice.

Artouche · 04-29-2008, 01:09 PM

Merci pour la rapidité de ta réponse!! J'ai eu une autre réponse entre temps d'un ami anglais que j'avais solicité (il fait une fac d'anglais en angleterre

) et il m'a changé pas mal de truc mais ça respecte mes idées. Je le poste à tout hasard, des fois que ça aiderait quelqun !!

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What I hope to accomplish within the next ten years are my most fulfilling ambitions; ambitions that i know in later life I will not be able to carry out. Ten years is a long period of time. In order to discuss, I feel it is best to highlight what i hope to accomplish in each five year intervals. The first five year period that i will talk about consists of the pursuit of my studies and what I am looking to dedicate to them and the second 5/6 years period will be a follow on from my initial discussion, which will consist of the beginnings of my working life. These two periods will be closely involved in travelling.

Thanks to the Erasmus program, travelling during the studies is really easy. Angers’s University has a lot of agreement with foreign Universities and with motivation supported by a school record in due form, you can study wherever you want for a short time period of a year in Europe. Then you are free to go on studying abroad but in certain countries (the United Kingdom is a good example), tuition fees are very expensive and I couldn’t afford it without the state financial help. Fortunately there exist other agreements with universities all around the world. They are called ISEP program or bilateral agreement and allow us to discover new cultures and to study away from France. The only drawback is that you can benefit from the Erasmus program just once.

I am going to spend my next year in Newcastle, England. I am looking forward to improving my English skills, to discovering the English style of life and making new foreign friends. In 2009, I would like to study in Japan, in Osaka where I have some Japanese friends. Therefore, I will have to organize this second year abroad whilst studying in England. I have already talked about this with the referent teacher and understand the strong work ethic that is required of me. After being postgraduate I would want to spent my last two years of studying in one country, however, i have yet to decide which country.

My main goal in studying languages is to be able to speak fairly fluently in at least 4 languages, French included, which will serve as my long term project. My current dream is to work either in a Hostelling International system for young people coming from everywhere or even to administer my own Hostelling International. These places are fantastic because they encourage personal blooming and increase people’s knowledge of foreign culture. They are good places to make friends for 1 week or maybe even for life. That is why I am an LEA student; by studying management, maws???? (LAWS?) and economy with 3 foreign languages, I will be able to carry out my dream.

In conclusion I would say that I want all my life to be travelling-oriented and limitless. This is why I want to devote my next ten years to travelling and studying languages. For the first time I am going to take advantage of the state and of the university assistance and hopefully fulfil a career in doing what i love most.

La seule chose qui me chiffonne, c'est le "for the first time, i am going to...", ça veut dire pour la 1ere fois, nan ? Je vais peut-être changer ça.

Merci !!

04-29-2008, 12:34 PM	#2 (permalink)
The_FD flying dancer Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Paris France Posts: 4,248 The_FD is a splendid one to behold The_FD is a splendid one to behold The_FD is a splendid one to behold	Une brève relecture et quelques suggestions pour ton texte qui n'est déjà pas mal du tout. What I hope to accomplish within the next ten years are my better projects; those I know that for certain reasons I won’t be able to carry out when my youth is over. Ten years is a long period and I think I can divide it into two shorter periods: about 5 years twice. The first period I am going to talk about is my study continuation and what I am going to dedicate to it and then, the second 5/6 years period is linked to the 1st and will deal with the beginning of my working life. These two periods will be closely involved in travelling. Thanks to the Erasmus program, travelling during while studying is really easy. The university of Angers has a lot of agreements with foreign universities and with motivation supported by a school record in due form, you can study wherever you want for a short time period of one year in Europe. The only drawback is that you can benefit from the Erasmus program only once. Then you are free to go on studying abroad but in certain countries (the United Kingdom is a good example), tuition fees are very expensive and I couldn’t afford it without the state financial help. Fortunately there exist other agreements with universities all around the world. They are called ISEP program or bilateral agreement and allow us to discover new cultures and to study far away from France. Moreover there are no limits; you can benefit from more than once. So, next year I am going to spend one year in Newcastle in England and I am looking forward to improving my English skill, to discovering the English style of life and to making new foreign friends. In 2009, I would like to study in Japan, in Osaka where I have some Japanese friends. Therefore, I will have to organize this second year abroad while I will be in England. I have already talked about this with the referent teacher and what I am sure is that I am going to study a lot. After being postgraduate I would like to spend my last two years as a student in one country but I don’t know yet which one to choose. I want to do all these studies to be able to speak quite fluently at least 4 languages, French included, which will hopefully be useful in my long term project. My current dream is either to work in an Hostelling International system for young people coming from everywhere or even to manage and to run my own Hostelling International. These places are fantastic because they favour the personal blooming and increase foreign culture knowledge. They are good places to make friends for 1 week or forever. That’s why I am a LEA student; by studying management, *maws (laws?)* and economy with 3 foreign languages, I will be able to carry out my dream. As a conclusion I’d say that I want all my life to be travel-oriented and that without any limit. Here is my plan for the next ten years. First, I am going to take advantage of the state and of the university assistances and then I am going to put what I have learned into practice. __________________ L'histoire de la famille Bourdillon Les fêtes d'Hébé The flying dancer dancing
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