relecture d'une réponse à une annonce en anglais svp !! merci !

Skyble · 03-08-2008, 11:28 PM

Bonjour,

J'aurais besoin de votre aide pour relire ma réponse à une annonce svp !!
Je réponds à une annonce pour une colocation mais je ne veux pas faire fuir mes "potentiels" colocataires avec un mail incompréhensible.
Pouvez vous me dire ce que vous en pensez et apporter vos modification si nécessaire ?

" Hi,
I have just seen your advertisement to rent a room in Washington and I am very interested.
I am a 22 years old girl French student and I will realize a training course with the Washington Center for 3 months (of mid-May to mid-August). So, I’m looking for a room not very far from my place of work to can go by bus all the morning. I’m good-natured, mature and I would have to realize a study of research during these 3 months so I should work hard.
I don’t smoke and I don’t have pets.
I speak english with few mistakes but I hope improve my English during this 3 months.

Is this offer still valid?
Is it possible to be connected to Internet in the house (with expenses additional)?

Thank you for your answers, "

Merci beaucoup de votre aide !

jierbe31 · 03-09-2008, 09:00 AM

Bonjour,

" Hi,
I have just seen your advertisement to rent a room in Washington and I am very interested.
I am a 22 year-old <girl> French student girl and I will <realize> follow a training course with the Washington Center for 3 months, <of> from mid-May to mid-August. So, I’m looking for a room to rent not very far from my <place of> work place <to> so that I can go there by bus <all the> every morning.
I’m good-natured, mature and I <would> will have to <realize>carry out a <study of> research during these 3 months. So I <should> will have to work hard.
I don’t smoke and I don’t have any pets.
I can speak an acceptable English <with few mistakes> but I hope to improve my <English> knowledge of the language during these 3 months.

Is this offer still valid?
Is it possible to <be connected to> get an Internet connection in the house, even with <expenses> additional charges?

Thank you for your answers, "

Merci beaucoup de votre aide !

* Il n'est pas nécessaire de te déprécier aux yeux de tes futurs colocs, d'où ma légère modification.

Bonne chance et bon séjour à Washington DC.

Skyble · 03-09-2008, 06:54 PM

merci de ton aide !!

jierbe31 · 03-09-2008, 07:53 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Skyble

merci de ton aide !!

You're welcome.

03-08-2008, 11:28 PM	#1 (permalink)
Skyble Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 24 Skyble is an unknown character at this point	relecture d'une réponse à une annonce en anglais svp !! merci ! Bonjour, J'aurais besoin de votre aide pour relire ma réponse à une annonce svp !! Je réponds à une annonce pour une colocation mais je ne veux pas faire fuir mes "potentiels" colocataires avec un mail incompréhensible. Pouvez vous me dire ce que vous en pensez et apporter vos modification si nécessaire ? " Hi, I have just seen your advertisement to rent a room in Washington and I am very interested. I am a 22 years old girl French student and I will realize a training course with the Washington Center for 3 months (of mid-May to mid-August). So, I’m looking for a room not very far from my place of work to can go by bus all the morning. I’m good-natured, mature and I would have to realize a study of research during these 3 months so I should work hard. I don’t smoke and I don’t have pets. I speak english with few mistakes but I hope improve my English during this 3 months. Is this offer still valid? Is it possible to be connected to Internet in the house (with expenses additional)? Thank you for your answers, " Merci beaucoup de votre aide !
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03-09-2008, 09:00 AM	#2 (permalink)
jierbe31 International Forum Great Member Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Midi-Pyrénées France Posts: 1,740 jierbe31 is a jewel in the rough jierbe31 is a jewel in the rough	Bonjour, " Hi, I have just seen your advertisement to rent a room in Washington and I am very interested. I am a 22 year-old <girl> French student girl and I will <realize> follow a training course with the Washington Center for 3 months, <of> from mid-May to mid-August. So, I’m looking for a room to rent not very far from my <place of> work place <to> so that I can go there by bus <all the> every morning. I’m good-natured, mature and I <would> will have to <realize>carry out a <study of> research during these 3 months. So I <should> will have to work hard. I don’t smoke and I don’t have any pets. I can speak an acceptable English <with few mistakes> but I hope to improve my <English> knowledge of the language during these 3 months. Is this offer still valid? Is it possible to <be connected to> get an Internet connection in the house, even with <expenses> additional charges? Thank you for your answers, " Merci beaucoup de votre aide ! * Il n'est pas nécessaire de te déprécier aux yeux de tes futurs colocs, d'où ma légère modification. Bonne chance et bon séjour à Washington DC.
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03-09-2008, 06:54 PM	#3 (permalink)
Skyble Junior Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 24 Skyble is an unknown character at this point	merci de ton aide !!
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