Correction d'un texte

Cacahuete586 · 10-10-2007, 11:42 AM

Bonjour,

Pouriez-vous me corriger ces 2 textes, s'il vous plait ?
Merci

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The food in India is so different to America, because in India, they don’t eat cow, for them it’s sacred. Dishes are composed principally chickens with spices and rice. Dishes are flavorful, they are simmering during many hours. Alimentation is healthier while in America, people eat hamburgers, French fries in fast-food. It’s fat, chemical and threat to health. Moreover in America, we don’t take more time for eat.

My travel in India was very outstanding! Over two weeks, I learnt many things on the country of my parents. I didn’t know that there were so many traditions. I’ve been surprise that Indians don’t eat cow while for me it’s natural to eat cow. The marriage of my uncle with my aunt was an experience wonderful for me, Indians people pray a lot. They have many God.
Moreover, India has several landscapes, big mountains, champaign, compact forest.
Taj Mahal is the symbol of India, is both lofty and majestic. We cannot be indifferent to this monument.
My receptive was very nice with me. We ate different traditional dishes of India, it was different but fine, I’ve never saw as much food in a marriage!
I learnt traditions and rituals with my receptive, now I’m more again tolerant with other, I understand the way of life of my family and this thanks to my travel. My mixed education between America and India is further well-rounded.

saïdkhan · 10-10-2007, 12:25 PM

The food in India is very different from that in America, because in India they don’t eat beef, since cows are sacred [to Hindus]. Dishes comprise mainly chicken with spices and rice. They are full of flavor because they are cooked for many hours. The food is healthier and more nutritious than in America, where people eat fast-food such as hamburgers and french fries, which are fattening, full of chemicals and unhealthy. Moreover in America, we don’t take enough time over eating.

My trip to India was outstanding! During two weeks, I learnt many things in the country of my parents. I never knew that there were so many traditions. I was surprised that Indians do not eat beef, because for me it is normal to eat it. The wedding of my uncle and aunt was a wonderful experience for me, Indians people pray a lot. They have many gods.

Moreover, India has many different landscapes, high mountains, countryside and dense forests. The Taj Mahal is the symbol of India, being both lofty and majestic. We cannot fail to take note of this monument.

My relatives were very nice to me. We ate different traditional dishes of India, it was different but fine, I have never seen as much food at a wedding!
I learnt traditions and rituals from my relatives, now I am more tolerant of others, I understand the way of life of my family and this is all thanks to my travel. My mixed education between America and India is even more well-rounded.

jierbe31 · 10-10-2007, 12:29 PM

Bonjour,

Corrections balisées en majuscules.

The food in India is so different from that in America, because in India, they don’t eat BEEF, for them it’s sacred. Dishes principally CONSIST OF chicken with spices and rice. Dishes are flavoUrful, they are KEPT simmering during many hours. FOOD is healthier THAN in America WHERE people eat hamburgers, French fries in fast-food RESTAURANTS. It’s fat, chemical and A threat to health. Moreover in America, we don’t take MUCH time TO HAVE MEALS.

My travel TO India was very outstanding! Over two weeks, I learnt many things on my parents' COUNTRY. I didn’t know that there were so many traditions. I WAS surpriseD that Indians don’t eat BEEF, whereas it’s natural for me to eat SOME. The marriage of my uncle with my aunt was a WONDERFUL experience for me, Indians people pray a lot. They have many godS.
Moreover, India has several landscapes, big mountains, COUNTRYSIDE, THICK forestS.
Taj Mahal, the symbol of India, is both lofty and majestic. We cannot be indifferent to this monument.
MY HOSTS WERE very nice TO me. We ate different traditional IndiaN dishes, it was different but fine. I’ve never sEEN SO much food in a marriage!
I learnt traditions and rituals with my HOSTS, now I’m MUCH more tolerant with otherS, I understand the way of life of my family thanks to my travel. My mixed education between America and India is further well-rounded.

10-10-2007, 12:25 PM	#2 (permalink)
saïdkhan Member Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Birmingham, England Posts: 67 saïdkhan is an unknown character at this point	Corrections The food in India is very different from that in America, because in India they don’t eat beef, since cows are sacred [to Hindus]. Dishes comprise mainly chicken with spices and rice. They are full of flavor because they are cooked for many hours. The food is healthier and more nutritious than in America, where people eat fast-food such as hamburgers and french fries, which are fattening, full of chemicals and unhealthy. Moreover in America, we don’t take enough time over eating. My trip to India was outstanding! During two weeks, I learnt many things in the country of my parents. I never knew that there were so many traditions. I was surprised that Indians do not eat beef, because for me it is normal to eat it. The wedding of my uncle and aunt was a wonderful experience for me, Indians people pray a lot. They have many gods. Moreover, India has many different landscapes, high mountains, countryside and dense forests. The Taj Mahal is the symbol of India, being both lofty and majestic. We cannot fail to take note of this monument. My relatives were very nice to me. We ate different traditional dishes of India, it was different but fine, I have never seen as much food at a wedding! I learnt traditions and rituals from my relatives, now I am more tolerant of others, I understand the way of life of my family and this is all thanks to my travel. My mixed education between America and India is even more well-rounded.
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10-10-2007, 12:29 PM	#3 (permalink)
jierbe31 International Forum Great Member Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Midi-Pyrénées France Posts: 1,013 Blog Entries: 2 jierbe31 is on a distinguished road	Bonjour, Corrections balisées en majuscules. The food in India is so different from that in America, because in India, they don’t eat BEEF, for them it’s sacred. Dishes principally CONSIST OF chicken with spices and rice. Dishes are flavoUrful, they are KEPT simmering during many hours. FOOD is healthier THAN in America WHERE people eat hamburgers, French fries in fast-food RESTAURANTS. It’s fat, chemical and A threat to health. Moreover in America, we don’t take MUCH time TO HAVE MEALS. My travel TO India was very outstanding! Over two weeks, I learnt many things on my parents' COUNTRY. I didn’t know that there were so many traditions. I WAS surpriseD that Indians don’t eat BEEF, whereas it’s natural for me to eat SOME. The marriage of my uncle with my aunt was a WONDERFUL experience for me, Indians people pray a lot. They have many godS. Moreover, India has several landscapes, big mountains, COUNTRYSIDE, THICK forestS. Taj Mahal, the symbol of India, is both lofty and majestic. We cannot be indifferent to this monument. MY HOSTS WERE very nice TO me. We ate different traditional IndiaN dishes, it was different but fine. I’ve never sEEN SO much food in a marriage! I learnt traditions and rituals with my HOSTS, now I’m MUCH more tolerant with otherS, I understand the way of life of my family thanks to my travel. My mixed education between America and India is further well-rounded. Last edited by jierbe31; 10-10-2007 at 12:32 PM.
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