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Cacahuete586 · 10-08-2007, 08:45 AM

Salut,
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The marriage in India is a tradition, it’s called the “Kalianon” on this photo, and we can saw my uncle with my aunt. The marriage is composed of different rites and the religion is more important during this period. It’s my Grand-Uncle and my Grand-Aunt who chosen my aunt for my uncle, during the ceremony, the god Ganesh was called. 
In America marriages lengths one day while in India, it celebrated during many days! I like this! My aunt is beautiful, marriages were colored, many flowers and people.

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Pūjā is a religious ritual that Hindus perform on a variety of occasions to pray. Pujas are reserved for special occasions like housewarming. In front of statue, this is my father.  He donates food and presents. Religion is more important that in America, she takes place more important. It’s only the father who is allowed to make the Puja while in America it’s all family who pry in churches.

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This is the famous monument on India, the Taj Mahal.
Before it’s my four cousins. Taj Mahal is a mausoleum located in Agra. I like this monument because it’s so different to Americans monuments; architecture as palates on Far-East, it’s imposing and majestic while in America is square, recent. In front of him, there are long rectangular basins with jets. I never saw something of also beautiful. For me it’s the 7th wonder of the world.

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This photo is beautiful because there were my relatives who live again in Bangalore. And again, tis are a small part of my family. Often, Indians families are numerous, more that in America (two or three children). This photo was taken the last day during my travel. We can see my 3 aunt and my cousins in front of the Old Fort in Delhi

Merci beaucoup

saïdkhan · 10-08-2007, 09:50 AM

1. Marriage is a tradition in India, called “Kalianon” [in the Tamil language]. In this photo, you can see my uncle and aunt. Weddings include different traditions and religion is very important during this period. My great-uncle and great-aunt chose my aunt for my uncle. During the ceremony, they invoked the god Ganesh.

In America weddings last for a day, while in India they are celebrated for many days! I like this! My aunt is beautiful, weddings are colorful, filled with flowers and people.

2. Pūjā is a religious ritual that Hindus perform on a variety of prayer occasions. Pujas are reserved for special occasions such as housewarmings. Here is my father in front of a statue. He donates food and presents. Religion is more important than in America, it plays a more significant role. Only the father is allowed to perform Puja, whereas in America the whole family prays in church.

3. This is the most famous monument in India, the Taj Mahal.
In front of it are four of my cousins. The Taj Mahal is a mausoleum located in Agra. I like this monument because it is so different from American ones. In the East, there is imposing and majestic architecture including palaces, but in America the architecture is square and modern. In front of the building, there are long rectangular pools with fountains. I never saw anything so beautiful. For me it is one of the seven wonders of the world.

4. This photo is beautiful because it shows my relatives who live back in Bangalore. And again, they are a small part of my family. Indian families are often large, more so than in America (where there are two or three children). This photo was taken on the last day of my travels. You can see three of my aunts and my cousins in front of the Old Fort in Delhi.

10-08-2007, 09:50 AM	#2 (permalink)
saïdkhan Member Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Birmingham, England Posts: 67 saïdkhan is an unknown character at this point	Corrections 1. Marriage is a tradition in India, called “Kalianon” [in the Tamil language]. In this photo, you can see my uncle and aunt. Weddings include different traditions and religion is very important during this period. My great-uncle and great-aunt chose my aunt for my uncle. During the ceremony, they invoked the god Ganesh. In America weddings last for a day, while in India they are celebrated for many days! I like this! My aunt is beautiful, weddings are colorful, filled with flowers and people. 2. Pūjā is a religious ritual that Hindus perform on a variety of prayer occasions. Pujas are reserved for special occasions such as housewarmings. Here is my father in front of a statue. He donates food and presents. Religion is more important than in America, it plays a more significant role. Only the father is allowed to perform Puja, whereas in America the whole family prays in church. 3. This is the most famous monument in India, the Taj Mahal. In front of it are four of my cousins. The Taj Mahal is a mausoleum located in Agra. I like this monument because it is so different from American ones. In the East, there is imposing and majestic architecture including palaces, but in America the architecture is square and modern. In front of the building, there are long rectangular pools with fountains. I never saw anything so beautiful. For me it is one of the seven wonders of the world. 4. This photo is beautiful because it shows my relatives who live back in Bangalore. And again, they are a small part of my family. Indian families are often large, more so than in America (where there are two or three children). This photo was taken on the last day of my travels. You can see three of my aunts and my cousins in front of the Old Fort in Delhi. Last edited by saïdkhan; 10-08-2007 at 12:02 PM.
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