Correction d'un texte

Cacahuete586 · 10-06-2007, 08:28 PM

Salut,

Est-ce possible de me corriger ces 2 textes ?

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My parents were arrived to America in 1990. This photo was taken the night during the housewarming, they wearied traditional clothes: the Sari. Clothes are colored, while in America, people wear occidental clothes.
Before come in America, ma parents lived in India, they were come in America for the “American Dreams”.  When my parents, were arrived to Wisteria Lane, in 1980, they bought a typical American house, many windows, white painting, vast gardens, they like nature as India.

This is the country where my parents were lived during 30 years. My parents spoke to me much about India. Then I decided to leave in travel over there. India is in the right of the Pakistan. My parents were from to Bangalore, it’s in the South India. In this city, there was the remainder of my family. The travel length 2 days: airline during 15 hours, 1 day of car. Bangalore is so different to Wisteria Lane, there was no buildings, few roads, lot of tree, the live was relax because few cars, few pollution thus . . . no stress!

En vous remerciant d'avance

Klowj · 10-06-2007, 11:49 PM

Et voilà le texte corrigé:

My parents arrived to America in 1990. This photo was taken at night during the housewarming, they were wearing traditional clothes: the Sari. Indian clothes are colored, while in America, people wear occidental clothes.Before coming in America, my parents were living in India, they came in America for the “American Dreams”. When my parents arrived to Wisteria Lane in 1980, they bought a typical American house with many windows, painted in white and that had vast gardens because they liked nature as in India. This is the country where my parents have lived 30 years. My parents spoke to me much about India. Then I decided to leave to travel over there. India is located to the East of Pakistan. My parents were from Bangalore, it’s the south of India. In this city, there was the remainder of my family. The travel took 2 days: a 15 hours flight and 1 day of car. Bangalore is so different from Wisteria Lane; there were no buildings, few roads, lot of trees, the life was relax because there were fewer cars, fewer pollution thus . . . no stress!

Par contre, j'ai mal compris ce que tu voulais dire par "there was the remainder of my family"

saïdkhan · 10-07-2007, 12:51 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Klowj

My parents arrived in America in 1990. This photo was taken at night during the housewarming, they were wearing traditional clothes known as the Sari. Indian clothes are colorful, whereas in America, people wear western clothes. Before coming to America, my parents were living in India; they came to America for the “American Dream”. When my parents arrived at Wisteria Lane in 1980 (? dix ans avant leur arrivée aux États Unis?), they bought a typical American house with many windows, painted in white with vast gardens because they liked nature as in India. This is the country where my parents have lived for thirty years. My parents spoke to me a lot about India. Then I decided to leave to travel there. India is located to the east of Pakistan. My parents were from Bangalore, it is in the south of India. In this city, lives the remainder of my family. Traveling took two days: a fifteen-hour flight and one day by car. Bangalore is so different from Wisteria Lane: there are no buildings, few roads and many trees; life is relaxed because there are fewer cars, less pollution, thus . . . no stress!

[J'ai utilisé l'orthographe américaine pour le contexte]

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Klowj International Forum Fan Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Québec, Canada Posts: 889 Klowj is on a distinguished road	Et voilà le texte corrigé: My parents arrived to America in 1990. This photo was taken at night during the housewarming, they were wearing traditional clothes: the Sari. Indian clothes are colored, while in America, people wear occidental clothes.Before coming in America, my parents were living in India, they came in America for the “American Dreams”. When my parents arrived to Wisteria Lane in 1980, they bought a typical American house with many windows, painted in white and that had vast gardens because they liked nature as in India. This is the country where my parents have lived 30 years. My parents spoke to me much about India. Then I decided to leave to travel over there. India is located to the East of Pakistan. My parents were from Bangalore, it’s the south of India. In this city, there was the remainder of my family. The travel took 2 days: a 15 hours flight and 1 day of car. Bangalore is so different from Wisteria Lane; there were no buildings, few roads, lot of trees, the life was relax because there were fewer cars, fewer pollution thus . . . no stress! Par contre, j'ai mal compris ce que tu voulais dire par "there was the remainder of my family" __________________ Mon blog: Rihla الإنسان عدو ما يجهل : علم لغة، تجتنب بلاهة حرب انشر ثقافة، تكتسب شعبا لشعب
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