cecyl

Hi

I'm french
Can you help me to correct my poetries
of my compendium "yahve"
(url of my blog in my profile)
The poem that goes, is it right or wrong ?

I.4 _ BEAUTIFUL DUMPS

On the tips of hoofs
A blood horse’s running across the sea

Gallop Beautiful Dumps
Under the fall's ending smack

Alone
At the hands of the ocean

You lose all ken
Clouds disguised the sky

cecyl, the little britain poet

Please, Reply "OK" if no mistake
I want to post it to a US forum of poetry