Marimi

I need help for the correction of this:
thank you very much!!!!

I‘m italian. I’m 24.
I was born in a little village, in the country in the north of Italy.
The name of that village is Postman, if you translate it in english.
I moved to Paris in september, 2006.
I decided to learn french and I did it.
I use to spend half of the day at the french school,
the other half working as a baby sitter for an american family.
In the rest of the day, I work on my drawings.

That happened after two years I didn’t do anything about art. I didn’t go to
the expositions, no Biennale or Documenta, no art magazines,
no recording any video, I just said no thanks .

But that’s because I’m capricorn, that means I have to bump my head
before understanding what I really care for.

jierbe31

Hello,

I‘m Italian. I’m 24.(capital to nationality names)
I was born in a little village, in the country in the north of Italy.
The name of that village is Postman, if you translate it in English.(capital)
I moved to Paris in September, 2006. (capital to the months names)
I decided to learn French and I did it.(capital to all language names)
I use to spend half of the day at the French school,(idem)
the other half working as a baby sitter for an American family.(idem)
During the rest of the day, I work on my drawings.

That happened after two years : I didn’t do anything about art. I didn’t go to
the exhibitions, no Biennale or Documenta, no art magazines,
no recording any video, I just said no thanks .

But that’s because I’m Capricorn, that means I have to bump my head
before understanding what I really care for.

* Good job anyway.

Marimi

Thank you very much!
There's just a little problem. When I write

That happened after two years : I didn’t do anything about art. I didn’t go to
the exhibitions, no Biennale or Documenta, no art magazines,
no recording any video, I just said no thanks

I just want to say that in these two years I didnt' blabla... so maybe I can say: that happened after two years in which I didnt...bla bla, or there's another way to say that?
THANKS! grazie!

Miriam

jierbe31

Well, on second thoughts, I guess it would be better to enrich this sentence with a few verbs such as : "For two years, I didn't do anything about art, didn't go to exhibitions nor Biennale or Documenta, didn't read art magazines nor recorded any video. I just said no thanks."
What do you think?
Hope it helps anyway.

Marimi

Thank you very much! I chose this version with the verbs... Merci!

jierbe31

Glad I could help and avec plaisir.

try2t

Hi
Just a quick piece of advice, contracted words like didn't, I'm, etc are usually used in informal documents or spoken english or dialogues, thus I would advise you to use the expanded version when writing formal documents, I am , you are, can not, did not.. etc