besoin d'aide en anglais

juliiii · 11-01-2006, 04:04 PM

bonjour j'ai quelques difficulté en anglais et j'aurai bien besoin de vôtre aide si vous le pouvé . Je doit écrire la suite d'un thriller et je voulé savoir si le travail que j'avais faite était correct. Le texte est le suivant :

"Mrs. Hatcher was frightened
Her face was white, and her eyes were large open.
She took her phone for call her nephew but suddenly she still heard this voice which said :
“No Mary … not call your nephew !
I want to see again you but… only !
Listen to me, tomorrow at 8.30 pm I will reappear in this part
But remember you; I want that nobody is informed”

Mrs Hatcher did’nt knows what to make. It was 12.00 pm. The clock sounded
She said : I dream ! it’s not possible. I think that I’m tired then I will sleep.
But during all the night Mrs Hatcher thought of this voice and maybe with this future meets.
She was anxious, but very inpatient too.
The following day, Mrs Hatcher was very upset .She wanted to speak about this history with her nephew but the voice had forbidden to him.
At 7.00 pm there was nobody in the house. Mrs Hatcher was shaking all over. She was petrified.
When suddenly, the clock sounded it was 8.00 pm . "

De plus j'aimerai savoir comment dire en anglais : " la lumière s'éteignit , les fenêtre s'ouvrit et claqua très fort ! Le vent s'introduit dans la maison, il faisait tout noir dans la pièce et tout au fond mme Hatcher vit une lumière s'approché . Elle était térorisé.
Le fantôme se mit face a mme Hatcher et lui dit :
Je suis venu te cherché tu va mourir et nous allons nous retrouver ...
Ah ah ah ah ah "
Personne ne sait ce qu'est devenu mme Hatcher pas son neveu !

merci d'avance

The_FD · 11-03-2006, 10:36 AM

here is a quick look at it

Quote:

Originally Posted by juliiii

"Mrs. Hatcher was frightened
Her face was white, and her eyes were large open.
She took her phone to call her nephew but suddenly she heard again this voice which said :
“No Mary … Do not call your nephew !
I want to see you again but… only !
Listen to me, tomorrow at 8.30 pm I will reappear in this part
But remember; I want nobody to be informed”

Mrs Hatcher didn't know what to do . It was 12.00 pm. The clock rang
She said : I am dreaming! it’s not possible. I think that I’m tired then I will sleep.
But during all the night Mrs Hatcher thought of this voice and of this possible future meeting.
She was anxious, but very impatient too.
The following day, Mrs Hatcher was very upset. She wanted to speak about this story with her nephew but the voice had forbidden it to her.
At 7.00 pm there was nobody in the house. Mrs Hatcher was shaking all over. She was petrified.
When suddenly, the clock rang, it was 8.00 pm . "

La suite au prochaine épisode

11-01-2006, 04:04 PM	#1 (permalink)
juliiii Brand New Member Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 1 juliiii is an unknown character at this point	besoin d'aide en anglais bonjour j'ai quelques difficulté en anglais et j'aurai bien besoin de vôtre aide si vous le pouvé . Je doit écrire la suite d'un thriller et je voulé savoir si le travail que j'avais faite était correct. Le texte est le suivant : "Mrs. Hatcher was frightened Her face was white, and her eyes were large open. She took her phone for call her nephew but suddenly she still heard this voice which said : “No Mary … not call your nephew ! I want to see again you but… only ! Listen to me, tomorrow at 8.30 pm I will reappear in this part But remember you; I want that nobody is informed” Mrs Hatcher did’nt knows what to make. It was 12.00 pm. The clock sounded She said : I dream ! it’s not possible. I think that I’m tired then I will sleep. But during all the night Mrs Hatcher thought of this voice and maybe with this future meets. She was anxious, but very inpatient too. The following day, Mrs Hatcher was very upset .She wanted to speak about this history with her nephew but the voice had forbidden to him. At 7.00 pm there was nobody in the house. Mrs Hatcher was shaking all over. She was petrified. When suddenly, the clock sounded it was 8.00 pm . " De plus j'aimerai savoir comment dire en anglais : " la lumière s'éteignit , les fenêtre s'ouvrit et claqua très fort ! Le vent s'introduit dans la maison, il faisait tout noir dans la pièce et tout au fond mme Hatcher vit une lumière s'approché . Elle était térorisé. Le fantôme se mit face a mme Hatcher et lui dit : Je suis venu te cherché tu va mourir et nous allons nous retrouver ... Ah ah ah ah ah " Personne ne sait ce qu'est devenu mme Hatcher pas son neveu ! merci d'avance
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