Skyble

Bonjour,
Je passe un entretien d'anglais pour entrer en école d'ingénieur et j'ai préparé une présentation de moi et de mes motivations à entrer dans cette école.
Si vous pouviez lire ce que j'ai écrit et corriger les plus grosses fautes ca m'arrangerait vraiment beaucoup !!
Merci d'avance

Hello, my name is Stéfanie, I’m twenty, I am from Moreuil, a little town next to Amiens.
My father is sales manager in a company of oil of engine and my mother is a schoolteacher. I have got two brother, one on 4ième and the other, older, studies in master of mathematics.

I am going to present my university records to you. After obtaining a high-school degree with a major in science and a speciality in biology, I attended two years in preparatory class BCPST (biology, physics, sciences of life and the earth) to aim to get into an agriculture’s school in such as INA, ENSA... During this time, I lived in boarding school on Amiens. Regrettably, I ‘m not successful my competitive examination and that’s why I have followed one year in faculty of biology to apply for parallel entrance to your school.
So, presently, I’m at the university of Picardie Jules Vernes in Amiens, in 2nd year of license of Biology, mention sciences of life and the earth.

My extra-curricular school activities are enough diversified. I've played tennis and practice judo since I was 6 years old. Regularly I also play basketball and practise diving the summer.
In addition to these sports, I also like read, writer and listen all sort of music. I played piano during four years and I try to play guitar. I also pass of time on my computer to be surfed on internet or to make programation.
During my holidays, I participate in different project of eco-voluntary service as in “chantiers- nature” in nature reserve. Two years ago I undertook in the program of study and protection of the seals of the Baie de Somme and since I help every year to supervise the release of young seals.
More generally, I like the nature and, living in the campaign, often make rides through fields.



I apply for ISA because it is, according to me, a school of the big fame which offer me all the chances of access to my professional project by working in the agricultural world with quality diploma.
She proposes a forming in permanent contact with the company through periods of trainings aiming at a first approach of the world of the work in touch with various studies fields.
Moreover, its membership in Fésia and his opening on the world allows her on one hand, to offer an access to an international programme for his student and on the other hand to collect a big variety of domains of specializations for the fifth year.

Among the various fields of application which proposes this school, I am more particularly enticed by the sector of the environment and your specialization " environment and rural planning ". Indeed, I think that it is the very important sector which will have to answer numerous challenges in the years to come as well at the level of the pollution of grounds as in that of the management of the waste.

In my point of view, the environment is also directly connected to the agriculture by its relationship in the water used for the cultures or by the development of fuel in oleaginous bases.


- What attracts me in engineer's profession is the fact of allying the show of initiative, the sense of the commitment and the quality of the human relations with the aim of leading a project. It is a profession where it is necessary to know how to be general-purpose and adapt itself quickly to the various circles with which we work, to be opened to the world of the agriculture as to that of the industry.

jackspeese

Salut Stefanie,
Je viens de faire une relecture de ton texte et j'ai corrige toutes les fauts sauf qu'aux deux phrases mises en [] dont leur signification je ne pige pas sans la version francais. Si t'as des autres questions, tu peux m'envoyer un e-mail ou demander a moi a travers de ce forum. En tout cas, je te souhaite du pot avec ton entretien.
-Jack

Hello, my name is Stéfanie, I’m twenty, I am from Moreuil, a little town next to Amiens.
My father is sales manager for a motor oil company and my mother is a schoolteacher. I have two brothers, one in his fourth year and the other, older, is pursuing a master's degree in mathematics.

I am going to present my university records to you. After obtaining a high-school degree with a major in science and a speciality in biology, I attended two years of BCPST (biology, physics, life and earth sciences) preparatory classes with the aim of getting accepted into an agriculture’s school such as INA, ENSA... During this time, I attended boarding school in Amiens. Regrettably, I did not pass my competitive examination and that’s why I have taken an additional year of biology courses in order to apply to your school.
So, presently, I’m attending the university of Picardie Jules Vernes in Amiens, in the 2nd year of the biology degree program, with a major in life and earth sciences.

My extra-curricular school activities are rather diversified. I've played tennis and practiced judo since I was 6 years old. I also play basketball on a regular basis and practice diving in the summer.
In addition to these sports, I also like read, write and listen all sorts of music. I played piano for four years and I try to play the guitar. I also spend time on my computer surfing the internet or making programs.
During my holidays, I participate in different projects of voluntary eco-service, such as in the “chantiers- nature” nature reserve. Two years ago I participated in the program of studying and protecting the seals of the Baie de Somme, and since then I help every year in supervising the release of young seals.
In general, I like nature and living in the country, and I often ride through the fields.



I am applying to ISA because it is, in my opinion, a well-known, respected school which offers me a chance to achieve my professional goals of working in the agricultural world with a quality diploma.

[She proposes a forming in permanent contact with the company through periods of trainings aiming at a first approach of the world of the work in touch with various studies fields.
Moreover, its membership in Fésia and his opening on the world allows her on one hand, to offer an access to an international programme for his student and on the other hand to collect a big variety of domains of specializations for the fifth year...pour ces deux phrases-ci, peux-tu me faire parvenir le texte francais original?]

Among the various programs offered by your school, I am particularly intrigued by the environmental sector and your "environment and rural planning" major. Indeed, I think that it is a very important sector which will have to answer numerous challenges in the years to come, such as pollution of the land and waste management.

In my point of view, the environment is also directly connected to agriculture by its relationship in the water used for crops or by the development of oleaginous-based fuel.


- What attracts me to engineering is the idea of uniting the showing of initiative, the sense of commitment, and the quality of human relations with the aim of leading a project. It is a profession in which it is necessary to know how to be general-purpose and adapt oneself quickly to the various circles with which we work, and to be open-minded to the world of agriculture as well as industry.

Skyble

Merci beaucoup Jack !! Ca fera tout de suite plus sérieux sans les fautes d'anglais le jour de l'entretien !

Les 2 phrases entre [ ] correspondent à :

" Elle propose une formation en contact permanent avec l‘entreprise à travers des périodes de stages visant ainsi une première approche du monde du travail en rapport avec les différentes filières étudiées.
De plus, son appartenance à la Fésia et son ouverture sur le monde lui permet d’une part, d’offrir un accès à un cursus international à ses étudiants et d’autre part de rassembler une grande diversité de domaines de spécialisation pour la 5ième année. "

Mais j'ai traduit pas mal au mot à mot donc c'est vrai que ca doit pas être très compréhensible en anglais.

Merci encore !!

Stefanie

jackspeese

Voici la partie qui reste, Stefanie. Il faut toujours se souvenir qu'on emploit les mots "he, she" seulement pour les etres vivants en anglais, toutes les autres choses inanimees prennent le pronom "it."

It offers an education in permanent contact with the business world through periods of training aimed at introducing the student to the working world in connection with the different subjects being studied.
Furthermore, its membership in Fesia and its gateway to the world enable it on one hand to offer an international studies program to its students and on the other hand to offer a large diversity of majors for the fifth year.

Skyble

Ahh oui, j'ai honte ! On me répète ca depuis pas mal d'années en plus!
En tout cas, encore une fois merci.