elainemarley

Bonjour !
Je suis étudiante a Bordeaux en Langues étrangères et j'ai postulé pour partir en mobilité au Canada dans le cadre d'une convention entre ma faculté et une faculté Canadienne (Winnipeg). Il me faut donc remetter le plus tôt possible une lettre de motivation en anglais dans laquelle j'expose mon projet pédagogique ( choix des matières etc), mais j'ai bien peur qu'elle contienne quelques erreurs ... vous me seriez d'un (très) grand secours si vous pouviez y apporter quelques corrections au niveau de la langue. Quant au contenu... qu'en pensez vous ? Merci beaucoup en tout cas, ce site est vraiment une aide précieuse et inespérée pour toutes les situations où on ne crache pas sur un petit coup de pouce !
Voila la lettre :

Dear Sir or Madam,


I'm studying modern languages at the University Michel de Montaigne in Bordeaux.


Within the framework of my degree course, I would like to study in Canada the first semester of next year. After having collected informations with the Department of International Relations of my University, I found the University of Winnipeg offered a wide swathe of courses that I am very interested in and that could coincide with the school career I chose my third university year, that is to say international relations.


This travel would allow me to improve my English and above all it would open my mind to another educational system and another culture, in particular if I can live with a Canadian family. Moreover, I think that such a trip could contribute to develop my adaptability which is a very important quality in the labour sphere and even in everyday life.


In France, this program is composed with civilization studies, translation, economics, law and international relations studies. So I picked several courses from the Winnipeg University website that could coincide with this program: advanced microeconomics, translation, twentieth century world, international law and global politics.
I feel really motivated for this plan because I am very interested in international relations and politics and I would like to make career in this field in the future.So I can ensure you that I am ready to work hard to make this trip successful and I hope my abilities will be of interest to you.


I join my curriculum vitae to this letter in which you will find the names of two professors able to give you some informations about my abilities and my behaviour as a student. Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope to hear from you soon.




Yours Faithfully,

[ merci !! ]

marielameche

Salut,
Il n'y a pas vraiment de fautes de grammaire, j'ai changé plutôt des éléments de style, il y a peut-être d'autres corrections à faire

Dear Sir/Madam,


I am currently studying modern languages at Michel de Montaigne University in Bordeaux (France).


Within the framework of my degree course, I would like to study in Canada the first semester of next year. Having collected information from my University's Department of International Relations, I saw the University of Winnipeg offered a wide range of courses I find of a great interest and that fit in perfectly with my career choices, as I have decided to study International Relations in my third university year.

This stay would allow me to improve my English and above all to open my mind to a different educational system and a different culture, especially if I can live with a Canadian family. Moreover, I think that such a trip could contribute to develop my adaptability which is a very important quality in the work sphere and even in everyday life.


In France, this program is composed of civilization studies, translation, economics, law and international relations studies. Hence I picked several courses from the Winnipeg University website that could coincide with this program: advanced microeconomics, translation, twentieth century world, international law and global politics.
I feel really motivated by this plan because I am very interested in international relations and politics and I would like my future career to be in this field. Thus I can ensure you that I am ready to work hard to make this stay successful and I hope my abilities will be of interest to you.


Please find my curriculum vitae enclosed in this letter. You will also find the names of two of my teachers who will be able to give you information about my abilities and my behaviour as a student.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Looking forward to hearing from you soon

Yours Faithfully,

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elainemarley

merci beaucoup pour cette aide rapide et efficace !! merci merci merci ! a bientot !

elainemarley

Rebonjour !
On m'a conseillé d'ajouté à la lettre de motivation une phrase sur l'importance de l'anglais dans mon cursus etc mais celle-ci m'a l'air sérieusement bancale ! Qu'en pensez-vous ?

"English language plays an important part in my studies with grammar and civilization courses and also the using of a language lab. Moreover, it also plays a more and more decisive role in the world so it became a central subject in international studies."

marielameche

Salut,
oui elle est un peu bancale
voila un proposition de reformulation:

English language is an important part of my studies which involve classes in grammar, civilization, and the use of a language lab. Moreover, it is playing an increasingly prominent role throughout the world, which is the reason for it being a core subject in international studies.

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elainemarley

Ok c'est vrai que c'est mieux comme ça!
Merci beaucoup !