remy4

Bonsoir,

Tout d'abord je vous remercie de prendre le temps de me lire et j'aimerais savoir s'il est possible de me corriger mon texte.

Je l'ai traduit du français vers l'anglais mais il doit comporter pas mal de fautes.

Donc si vous pouvez me le corriger je vous serai très reconnaissant. Merci.

Donc le texte parle d'une "peinture" je vous met les liens où vous pouvez la voir (ça peut aider pour la traduction) :
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Le texte donne :
"I will present to you the painting which I made with the website Mrpicassohead. The scene is very simple. We can see two characters back to back. On the left, we can imagine that it is a man. He wears a coat and holds a knife in his hand. On the right, we can recognize a woman dressed up as in the Seventies with a beret. The dark side of painting lets imagine that the scene takes place the evening. Perhaps in a cellar, where the light would return only by one small window. Why the people are back to back? Why the man holds a knife in his hand? Does he intend to kill the woman? But in this case, why the man would be back to back with her and why the knife would be on the left and not near to the woman? The history doesn’t hold water. Perhaps people want to commit suicide? We can imagine, for example, that the lady already inserted her knife. The light could thus symbolize the way towards the death. However, it is strange that people are still standing. There must be another explanation well. Someone have an idea? Thus, this painting inspires a side obscure, in particular by the presence of the knife. ut what means this knife? Why is it directed upwards? Does it try to show us something? What means this scribble in the top left? What is the symbolic? Perhaps, this painting isn’t so dark and hides a share of secret. Thus, if we turn the painting, we can see another scene. We don’t see any more two people back to back but two people face to face exchanging a glance. The knife is in fact only a jewel. And the features which could make think of the death represent only a heart with the face of people. But what does this scribble represent in the bottom right? It is in fact the painting’s signature. We can recognize the letters L O V E."

Merci beaucoup pour votre aide.

Nemesis 5.4

Bon alors voilà j'ai corrigé quelques petites choses mais il faudrait attendre que quelqu'un passe derrière moi c'est pas encore parfait (loin de là ). De plus j'ai corrigé que l'expression pure mais certains passages semblent un peu bizarres :/

I will present you the painting that I made using the website Mrpicassohead. The scene is very simple. We can see two characters back to back. On the left, we can imagine that it is a man. He wears a coat and holds a knife in his hand. On the right, we can recognize a woman dressed up as in the Seventies with a beret. The dark part of the painting lets us imagine that the scene takes place in the evening. Perhaps in a cellar, where the light would return only by one small window. Why are the two characters back to back? Why is the man holding a knife in his hand? Does he intend to kill the woman? But in this case, why would the man be back to back with her and why would the knife be on the left and not next to (ou near mais sans le "to" dans ce cas) the woman? The history doesn’t hold water. Perhaps those people want to commit suicide? We can imagine, for example, that the lady has already inserted her knife (stabbed the man ?). The light could thus symbolize the way towards death. However, it seems strange that the two characteres are still standing. There must be another explanation whatsoever. Does someone have any idea ? Moreover, this painting inspires an obscure side (il va falloir trouver autre chose là je pense...),in particular by the presence of the knife. But what is the meaning of this knife? Why is it directed upwards? Is it trying to show us something? What means this scribble on the top left ? What is the symbolic? Perhaps this painting isn’t so dark and hides a share of secret. Then, if we turn the painting, we can see another scene. We don’t see two people back to back anymore but two people face to face exchanging a glance. The knife is in fact only a jewel. And the features that could make us think of the death represent only a heart with the face of the two people. But what does this scribble represents on the bottom right? It is in fact the painting’s signature. We can recognize the letters L O V E."

Voilà voilà.

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