napoleon

Bonjour,
J'ai un thème à faire pour demain, et je voudrais seulement une vérification, histoire de ne pas faire trop de fautes. Merci bcp

texte d'origine, en français :

Dans la chambre, Ingrid sormait toujours. Rigaud s'assit au pied du lit et contempla ce visage lisse et enfantin. Il savait qu'il ne retrouverait plus le sommeil.
Il vint s'appuyer au rebord du balcon. De là, il pouait encore veiller sur elle. la joue gauche d'Ingrid reposait contre son bras tendu. Sa main flottait dans le vide. il entendit les claquements de sabots qui anonçaient le passage du fiacre, si tard ? Le bruit se rapprochait et il pencha au balcon dans l'espoir de voir passer le cheval blanc. Mais un bouquet de pins cachait le tournant dans la route du Cap.

Le thème que je propose :

In the room, Ingrid was still sleeping ! Rigaud sat down at .... of the bed and gazed at this mooth and hildish face. He knew that he would never recover the sleep.
He came and leart on the sill of the balcon. From here, he could still watch over her. Ingrid's left ... was resting on her out shretched arm. Her hand floated in the empty space. He heard slaus of sabots which foretold the passing of the hackney, and wondered if he was not deluding himself. Why this hackney, so late ? The noise drew water rearer to him and he ... at the balcon in the hope of seeing the white horse when it passes. But a clump of pines hid the bend on the road to Capetown.



MERCI ENCORE !

napoleon

Merci ! ...........................

lyss45

Bonjour,

Bon, tu as quand même fait l'effort de traduire par toi-même, alors je vais essayer de t'aider.

Voici ma suggestion (je ne nie pas le fait qu'une autre traduction puisse être plus appropriée) :

Ingrid was still sleeping in the bedroom. Rigaud sat down the leg of the bed and gazed at that smooth and childish face. He knew he would never recover his sleep. He came and leant on the balcony edge. From there, he could keep watching over her. Ingrid's left cheek was leaning back against her outstreched arm. Her hand was streaming into space. He heard the clatterings of the hooves that heralded the coming of the hackey (carriage), [... tu sembles avoir oublié un passage...], that late? The commotion was getting closer and he bent over the balcony in the hope of seeing the white horse go by. But a clump of pines was hiding the bend from sight in the road to the Cape.

Genius cindy

Hello, would you like the opinion of a helpful Canadian? I have a Bachelor of Arts in English Literature as well as many years of studying French.

texte d'origine, en français :

Dans la chambre, Ingrid sormait toujours. Rigaud s'assit au pied du lit et contempla ce visage lisse et enfantin. Il savait qu'il ne retrouverait plus le sommeil.
Il vint s'appuyer au rebord du balcon. De là, il pouait encore veiller sur elle. la joue gauche d'Ingrid reposait contre son bras tendu. Sa main flottait dans le vide. il entendit les claquements de sabots qui anonçaient le passage du fiacre, si tard ? Le bruit se rapprochait et il pencha au balcon dans l'espoir de voir passer le cheval blanc. Mais un bouquet de pins cachait le tournant dans la route du Cap.

Le thème:

In the room, Ingrid was still sleeping. Rigaud sat on the end of the bed and gazed at her smooth babyish face. He knew that he couldn't go back to sleep.
He went and leaned on the ledge of the balcony. From there, he could still watch over her. Ingrid's left cheek was resting on her out-stretched arm. Her hand floated in the empty space. He heard a clattering of sabots which told him the hackney was about to pass, so late? The sound came nearer and he leaned on the balcony in the hope of seeing the white horse pass by. But a clump of pines hid the bend on the road to Capetown (to the Cape?).

napoleon

arf j'avais du le rendre au prof déjà... c'est pas grave ça me permet de connaitre mes erreurs, merci de votre gentillesse, a bientôt.

Genius cindy

Your thanks are most appreciated. It was my first time visiting this site and I couldn't resist your plea for help! Good luck with your English studies.

Cindy

Zeloguy

[quote=Genius cindy]Hello, would you like the opinion of a helpful Canadian? I have a Bachelor of Arts in English Literature as well as many years of studying French. [quote]

How different if "Canadian French" from "French French". I have been wanting to go on a trip to Montreal but am schooled only in European French.

Merci!

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