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Bonjour!
Vous serait-il possible de m'indiquer s'il y a des fautes dans la lettre de motivation suivante et comment les corriger?
Je vous remercie d'avance!

Dear ...,

I am passionate about the functioning of the brain, and more particularly about autistic savants, consciousness and the source of creativity. One year ago, I chanced upon the documentary “Beautiful minds: a voyage into the brain”, which greatly stimulated my curiosity as well as my desire to work with you. I am fascinated by the subject of your investigation, your scientific approach and your methods, such as TMS, which I found very exciting and promising, and I would be very honoured if I could participate and help your team in its research.

I graduated last year from the Federal Polytechnic School of Lausanne with a bachelor degree in life sciences, and am now finishing the first year of master with a specialisation in neurosciences. I have the possibility to effectuate one or two semesters of the second year of master abroad, and I am convinced that working in your lab could be extremely rewarding. I have a solid polyvalent scientific background, am very motivated and already gained experience in carrying out a study in cognitive neuroscience in the framework of my bachelor project.

Please find my CV enclosed. In advance, thank you for your time and attention. I look forward to your response.

Sincerely,
...

Tunisialoveuz

Bonsoir, voilà les rectifications que je ferais. Sinon, le reste a l'air pas mal. Mais il faudrait l'avis d'un anglophone.

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