Christou

Salut! J'aimerais avoir une correction de ce commentaire.Pourriez-vous m'aider svp?

To present this document, we could say that it consists of a video. It deals with a documentary on polar bears which live on the Hudson Bay, in the northeastern part of Canada. From the doctors and the scientists, we can deduce that this video is an advert that denounces that the eco system is in danger.
To sum up the video, we could say that it is about an animal documentary on the life of polar bears. We find several interviews on persons there studying this animal, as doctor Lunn there. According to him, polar bears are sending a warning signal because the eco system is in danger.
I am now going to comment on the journalist's views which are presented in the video. As I pointed out earlier, this video talks about the polar bears living in Wapusk National Park, which is situated in Hudson Bay. The doctor Lunn has spent twenty years studying polar bears. He thinks that they are sending a warning signal because they are in danger. Indeed, they are forced ashore earlier because the ice melts sooner. So they are coming ashore lighter and lighter. However, thanks to the tests made on polar bears, scientists have been building a huge database on polar bears.
I really appreciated the video because the polar bear is one of my favourite animals. I gave me the desire to know it more on this animal.

Merci d'avance pour vos réponses!

Garfield

Allons y^^:

To present this document, we could say that it is a video. It deals with polar bears which live on the Hudson Bay, in the northeastern part of Canada. From the doctors and the scientists (presented on the video. Si tu me "the doctors and the scientist", il faut un complément après. Si tu parles de manière généale, retire l'article), we can deduce that this video is a warning that tells that the eco system is in danger. (ou that denounces an endangered ecosystem)
To sum up the video, we could say that it is about the life of polar bears. We find several interviews of persons there studying this animal, as doctor Lunn. According to him, polar bears are sending a warning signal because the eco system is in danger.
I am now going to comment on the journalist's views which are presented in the video. As I pointed out earlier, this video talks about the polar bears living in Wapusk National Park, which is situated in Hudson Bay. The doctor Lunn has spent twenty years studying polar bears. He thinks that they are sending a warning signal because they are in danger. Indeed, they are forced ashore earlier because the ice melts sooner. So they are coming ashore lighter and lighter (je ne comprends pas bien la phrase. Tu parle du poids des ours?). However, thanks to the tests made on polar bears, scientists have been building a huge database on polar bears.
I really appreciated the video because the polar bear is one of my favourite animals. I gave me the desire to know it more on this animal.

squirry

bon je ne vais pas tout corriger car tout sonne bien français mais déjà les grosses bizarreries ....

"As an introduction for this document"
To present this document, we could say that it is a video. It deals with polar bears which live on the Hudson Bay, in the northeastern part of Canada.

From the doctors' and the scientists's point of view
From the doctors and the scientists (presented on the video. Si tu me "the doctors and the scientist", il faut un complément après. Si tu parles de manière généale, retire l'article), we can deduce that this video is a warning that tells that the eco system is in danger. (ou that denounces an endangered ecosystem)

To sum up the video, we could say that it is about the life of polar bears. We find (??? we hear - see ?)several interviews of persons there studying this animal, as doctor Lunn. According to him, polar bears are sending a warning signal because the eco system is in danger. ( ils envoient le signal en morse, les ours ? lol ) Polar bears are giving us the proof that the environment is under danger.

I am now going to comment on the journalist's views which are presented in the video. As I pointed out earlier, this video talks about the polar bears living in the Wapusk National Park, which is situated in Hudson Bay. Doctor Lunn has spent twenty years studying polar bears. He thinks that they are sending a warning signal because they are in danger. - REPETITION
Indeed, they are forced ashore earlier because the ice melts sooner. So they are coming ashore lighter and lighter (je ne comprends pas bien la phrase. Tu parle du poids des ours?).moi non plus
However, thanks to the tests made on polar bears, scientists have been building a huge database on polar bears.
I really appreciated the video because the polar bear is one of my favourite animals. I gave me the desire to know it more on this animal. Polar bears are amongst my favourite animals - it made me want to know more about them. Dsl mais desire est un peu connoté en anglais

Voila...

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Christou

Salut! Pourriez-vous me corriger les fautes de ce texte svp?

This video is interesting as it raises a burning issue of the world in which we live. Indeed, it leads us to wonder if polar bears are in danger, it is because of the ice melting.
On the one hand, we can't but acknowledge that the eco-system is in danger and that the existence of polar bears on the Hudson Bay is under threat. Indeed, as the air temperature in spring has been warming each decade several degrees, glaciers on the Hudson Bay begin melting. So, polar bears which go hunting in winter are forced ashore earlier to feed. However, there is not only polar bears which are in danger, but the entire eco-system. For example, the ice melting will have as a result the disappearance of certain animal species, notament navy, as seals, and the modification of the way of life of inhabitants of this region.
On the other hand, we must bear in mind that the ice melting also as a global impact. Indeed, from my point of view, if glaciers continue to melt so quickly, the level of oceans is going to increase very fast also. Moreover, eleven most big cities of the world are situated in easily flooded zones. There is no doubt that if it occured, millions of persons should make an exodus to avoid this disaster.
To conclude, the ice melting is responsible for important turnovers which put in danger the people but also the fauna and the flora, which is in the polar regions or in the global scale.

Merci d'avance pour vos réponses!

Jessierugg

This video is interesting as it raises a burning issue of the world in which we live. Indeed, it leads us to wonder if polar bears are in danger, because of the ice melting.
On the one hand, we can't but acknowledge that the eco-system is in danger and that the existence of polar bears on the Hudson Bay is under threat. Indeed, as the air temperature in spring has been warming each decade several degrees, glaciers on the Hudson Bay have begun to melt. So, polar bears which go hunting in winter are forced ashore earlier to feed. However, it is not only polar bears which are in danger, but the entire eco-system. For example, the ice melting will have as a result the disappearance of certain animal species, notament navy, as seals, (Je ne comprends pas exactement ce que vous voulez dire ici... vous voulez dire que les phoques sont en danger?? Dans ce cas vous pouvez dire " the disappearance of certain animal species, notably seals,"...) and the modification of the way of life of inhabitants of this region.
On the other hand, we must bear in mind that the ice melting also has a global impact. Indeed, from my point of view, if glaciers continue to melt so quickly, the level of oceans is also going to increase very fast. Moreover, eleven of the largest cities of the world are situated in easily flooded zones. There is no doubt that if it occured, millions of persons should make an exodus to avoid this disaster.
To conclude, the ice melting is responsible for important turnovers which put in danger the people but also the fauna and the flora in the polar regions and on the global scale.

I hope I helped you, Jessica