angelmagali

Je dois rendre un devoir dans le cadre de mon bts, est que quelqu'un pourrait corriger mes fautes svp? Le but étant d'imaginer un entretien de vente:
- « May I inform you madam ?
- Yes, thank you. In fact, I’m looking for some presents for my children. I have a ten year-old daughter and a three year old son. I want you to show me your best seller. I don’t want to spend too much money, so propose me some cheap clothes.
- Ok. Do you like red color ? Because I have just received a beautiful dress, not expensive, it costs only fifteen euros.
- Yes,I do. Wonderful ! And what about my son ?
- For your son, I think that a flowery shirt and a pair of jeans could be great. Look at this model.
- It’s exactly what I want.
- Would you like to see something else madam ? At the moment, we have a promotion on tee-shirt with long sleeves, would you like to see them ?
- No, thank you. I have all that I need.
- So if you want, Follow me at the till. How do you want to pay ?
- I will pay by credit card, do you need my identity card ?
- No, I don’t.
- How much is it for all the things I have took ?
- Fifty five euros please madam. I give you your till receipt. I hope to see you again in our store. Thank you and have a nice day.
- Bye. »

Tulip Red

Correction:

- « May I inform you madam ?
- Yes, thank you. In fact, I’m looking for some presents for my children. I have a ten-year-old daughter and a three-year-old son. I would like (ça fait moins direct que want qui signifie 'veut' et would like qui signifie 'voudrait')you to show me your best seller. I don’t want to spend too much money, so propose me some cheap clothes, please.
- Ok. Do you like red color ? Because I have just received a beautiful dress, not expensive, it costs only fifteen euros.
- Yes,I do. Wonderful ! And what about my son ?
- For your son, I think that a flowery shirt and a pair of jeans could be great. Look at this model.
- It’s exactly what I want.
- Would you like to see something else madam ? At the moment, we have a promotion on tee-shirts with long sleeves, would you like to see them ?
- No, thank you. I have all that I need.
- So if you want, Follow me to the till. How do you want to pay ?
- I will pay by credit card, do you need my identity card ?
- No, I don’t.
- How much is it for all the things I have taken ?
- Fifty five euros please madam. I give you your till receipt. I hope to see you again in our store. Thank you and have a nice day.
- Bye. »

Voilà

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Ağlama Filistinim, yanındayız, her gün duâlarımızdasın... Unutmayın, bir gün güneş doğacak, karşı duran fırtınalar durulacak, ALLAH büyük:bekleyin de görün...

Seven advice of Mevlana
-In generosity and helping others, be like a river
-In compassion and grace, be like sun
-In concealing others' faults, be like night
-In anger and fury, be like dead
-In modesty and humility, be like earth
-In tolerance, be like a sea
-Either exist as you are or be as you look

angelmagali

Merci beaucoyp Tulip Red! Super sympa de ta part. Une dernière chose ce dialogue n'est il pas trop léger pour un niveau BTS a ton avis?

Tulip Red

C'est quoi en fait le BTS, je ne suis pas en France...

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Ağlama Filistinim, yanındayız, her gün duâlarımızdasın... Unutmayın, bir gün güneş doğacak, karşı duran fırtınalar durulacak, ALLAH büyük:bekleyin de görün...

Seven advice of Mevlana
-In generosity and helping others, be like a river
-In compassion and grace, be like sun
-In concealing others' faults, be like night
-In anger and fury, be like dead
-In modesty and humility, be like earth
-In tolerance, be like a sea
-Either exist as you are or be as you look