Correction de mon orthographe svp

foundette · 03-25-2007, 12:50 PM

Bonjour,
Je dois présenter un texte en anglais pour mardi, j'aurai besoin d'aide pour la correction de mon orthographe mais surtout de ma grammaire.
Quelqu'un pourrait il m'aider en corrigeant mon texte, tout en en gardant l'esprit et surtout, m'aider à comprendre certaines de mes plus grosses fautes. Il faut egalement garder a l'esprit que j'en suis a ma deuxieme annee d'anglais... N'hesitez pas a me demander ce que j'ai voulu dire, je reste derriere mon pc a guetter vos remarques...

Merci (beaucoup) d'avance,
voici mon texte:

MOTIVATION DU SUJET

I have taking this subject because I like so much this movie and Coolio’s song (Gangsta’s paradise). I have always listened to it for 10 years. And when I listen to it, I remember the movie. That explains my choice.

INTRODUCTION

I’m going to speak about a film called « Dangerous Minds ».
This movie was directed by John N. Smith in 1995 with the famous Michel Pfeiffer in the principal role. This film became a box office success grossing total of approximately 180 000 000 dollars in his world wide revenues and went on to inspire a number of films.

CORPS DU TRAVAIL / SYNOPSIS DU FILM

Dangerous Minds is a drama/thriller film based on a biography written by, and about the life of, LouAnne Johnson who is interpreted by Michel Pfeiffer. This movie tells the true story of a retired Marine who leaves her career to become an English teacher. But a class with problems is entrusted to her. It’s the begin of the hell for LouAnne.
The majority of her pupiles are poor and come from the gettos who drugs is a real problem. The pupils fight for anything, they are doped, they have problems with their families and they are often made stop by the police for possession of drugs. Michel realizes that her pupils have great intellectual abilities and it decides to fight to help them to learn. It’s the only means to save their lives.

AVIS PERSONNEL
My personal opinion is that it’s a good film. It’s a psychological thriller which teaches us the truth on the colleges from suburbs. The first time that I was so young to understand really but with the passing, I realized the important topics.
Personally, I think that’s a good middle to make open the people’s eyes on the reality.
Now, I will make you listen the Coolio’s song. It’s the original soundtrack of “Dangerous Minds”. => Gangsta’s Paradise

cocoChris72 · 03-30-2007, 01:07 PM

Quote:

I chose this subject because I like so much this movie and Coolio’s song (Gangsta’s paradise). I have been listening to it for 10 years. And when I listen to it, I remember the movie. That explains my choice.

INTRODUCTION

[...]

CORPS DU TRAVAIL / SYNOPSIS DU FILM

[...]
The majority of her pupiles are poor and come from the gettos where drugs is a real problem. The pupils fight for anything, they are doped, they have problems with their families and they are often stopped by the police for possession of drugs. Michel realizes that her pupils have great intellectual abilities and decides to do everything that is possible to help them learn. It’s the only means to save their lives.

AVIS PERSONNEL

My personal opinion is that it’s a good film. It’s a psychological thriller which teaches us the truth on the colleges from suburbs. The first time I was too young to understand really but with time, I realized the important topics.
Personally, I think that’s a good way to open people’s eyes on reality.
Now, I will make you listen the Coolio’s song. It’s the original soundtrack of “Dangerous Minds”. => Gangsta’s Paradise

Correction à améliorer s'il est encore temps.

03-25-2007, 12:50 PM	#1 (permalink)
foundette Brand New Member Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 2 foundette is an unknown character at this point	Correction de mon orthographe svp Bonjour, Je dois présenter un texte en anglais pour mardi, j'aurai besoin d'aide pour la correction de mon orthographe mais surtout de ma grammaire. Quelqu'un pourrait il m'aider en corrigeant mon texte, tout en en gardant l'esprit et surtout, m'aider à comprendre certaines de mes plus grosses fautes. Il faut egalement garder a l'esprit que j'en suis a ma deuxieme annee d'anglais... N'hesitez pas a me demander ce que j'ai voulu dire, je reste derriere mon pc a guetter vos remarques... Merci (beaucoup) d'avance, voici mon texte: MOTIVATION DU SUJET I have taking this subject because I like so much this movie and Coolio’s song (Gangsta’s paradise). I have always listened to it for 10 years. And when I listen to it, I remember the movie. That explains my choice. INTRODUCTION I’m going to speak about a film called « Dangerous Minds ». This movie was directed by John N. Smith in 1995 with the famous Michel Pfeiffer in the principal role. This film became a box office success grossing total of approximately 180 000 000 dollars in his world wide revenues and went on to inspire a number of films. CORPS DU TRAVAIL / SYNOPSIS DU FILM Dangerous Minds is a drama/thriller film based on a biography written by, and about the life of, LouAnne Johnson who is interpreted by Michel Pfeiffer. This movie tells the true story of a retired Marine who leaves her career to become an English teacher. But a class with problems is entrusted to her. It’s the begin of the hell for LouAnne. The majority of her pupiles are poor and come from the gettos who drugs is a real problem. The pupils fight for anything, they are doped, they have problems with their families and they are often made stop by the police for possession of drugs. Michel realizes that her pupils have great intellectual abilities and it decides to fight to help them to learn. It’s the only means to save their lives. AVIS PERSONNEL My personal opinion is that it’s a good film. It’s a psychological thriller which teaches us the truth on the colleges from suburbs. The first time that I was so young to understand really but with the passing, I realized the important topics. Personally, I think that’s a good middle to make open the people’s eyes on the reality. Now, I will make you listen the Coolio’s song. It’s the original soundtrack of “Dangerous Minds”. => Gangsta’s Paradise
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