mia

I´m not an english native speaker but I live in Australia since awhile and long enough to tell you that there are quite a lots of mistakes in your translation. The vocabulary is correct, but the way you formulate your sentences is not. It really sounds like French turned into English to me... Maybe you could send the original text in French and somebody could help you translating it correctly. You could maybe also send the text in short parts rather than the full text at once... so people would be more motivated to reply and help you!!!!

Mia